# There is the sound of those fleeing
"Listen and you will hear those who are fleeing"
# those ... those ... These
The words "those" and "These" refer to the survivors from Babylon who will tell others about Yahweh's vengeance.
# the vengeance of Yahweh our God for Zion, and vengeance for his temple
The abstract noun "vengeance" can be stated as an action. Alternate translation: "Yahweh our God has taken revenge for what they did to Zion and to his temple in Jerusalem" (See: [[rc://en/ta/man/jit/figs-abstractnouns]])